Nice, deep and understandable. I got one thing to say though, even if it has rhyme (and it's not necessary to make a poem) some phrases don't catch up to others in length, so if you read it, it kind of cuts the phrase where it shouldn't or it's too long and the timing passes. This can only be corrected if it's read by the author, because he knows where to make a stop, how to read the words and when it changes. While it's read by another, that person makes up his own timing, and it gets messed up.
So, i guess the only way would be to hear you read it, and we can't, so i'll say it's great. I'll try to look my own way of reading it.
I've made some phrases also, they're good, but they only have 4 lines on them each and aren't alike in meaning, so i think i'll turn them into a song.