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shadowfire

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shadowfire's wanabe comic
« on: October 03, 2009, 03:37:21 pm »
ill try to post another 2-4 pages every day or so and if anyone who can draw because i suck at even stick figures wants to take a crack at animating it go for it ^_^ heres what i got so far and let me know what you think good or bad i want to improve ^_^


page 1
1   starts out with a young girl walking down a backally
2   she looks around "why would he ask me to meet him in such a strange
   place?"
3   she turns back and is face to face with a type 1.5
4   "hello missy" he says "who are you?" she asks putting a arm
   defensively in front of her "what is more accurate" he replies
5   the 1.5 with its fangs in her neck she has a shocked horrified look on
   her face

page 2
1   three 1.5 stand around as the alpha feeds on girl "looks like we
   missed a few rats on our last sweep" someone off panel says
2   two groups of three hunters stand blocking either end of the ally one
   of each group holds a sword and shield while the other two from each
   team hold shortbows with the group of 1.5 in the middle the alpha has
   stoped feeding
3   "what do you humans want" the alpha says looking at the captain
   who is one of the two holding the sword but is in more decorated armor
4   "to watch" the captain said grinning as he sheathed his sword
5   downward veiw from just over building top agozyen stands on the
   ledge watching

page 3
1   veiw over the should of the 1.5 the captain has his hand in the air
   fingers pointed up "what are you doing old man" the alpha said
2   the captain drops his hand and says "now agozyen"
3   veiw from ledge agozyen is gone and the alpha is coved in darkness
4   veiw from ground the three 1.5 back up slowly as the darkness starts
   to build up in the form of agozyen revealing the alphas legs first
5   agozyen stands before the remaining 1.5 who cower back from him the
   alpha lays at his feet mutilated "hello vermin" agozyen says

page 4
1   veiw inside the door or a dark bar several patrons lay passed out on
   the floor some bleeding or dead
2   veiw behind the bar mira and rome sit having a dark colored drink "im
   bored rome whats there to do in this piss poor town" mira said "hell if
   i know agozyen came through here for some reason and we need to
   find him" rome replyed
3   mira raises her free hand palm up "he is a strange one isnt he" she
   said "you dont know the half of it" rome said taking a drink
4   rome finishes his drink "come on we need to get moving who knows
   how far ahead he got" mira looks over at him pouty "but we were just
   starting to bond"
5   mira pulls her blade from the body of a dead soldier who was pinned
   to a support beam

page 5
1   the knight captain is presenting agozyen with a bag of gold and gems
   circled by a group of knights "you have our thanks good sir" the
   captain says "im just find having your gold"
2   agozyen pulls at the bag but the captain dosnt let go "how do we know
   you wont just kill us after we pay you"
3   all the knights have their hands on their swords "because youve
   planed on killing me the whole time captain" agozyen says hand still
   on the bag
4   "you dont seem surprized" the captain says "should i have been"
   agozyen replies all the knights have their blades drawn

page 6
1   veiw from behind mira and rome who are walking along a dirt road
   with a small city barrly visable on the horrizon "ive been wondering
   whats going on between you and agozyen?" rome says head turned to
   mira "nothing" mira replies head forward
2   veiw from in front of the two a small village is on fire behind them " i
   thought you were spending some alone time with him just before his
   went missing" rome says hand on chin "when did you decide to become
   a detective" mira snapes angry look on her face
3   veiw from behind a young man comes from romes side and slams into
   him with a sword drawn
4   rome is on ground with one hand over his eyes the other searching for
   his sunglasses "fucking hell son of a bitch knocked off my glasses
   mira help my eyes it hurts"
5   stranger has mira at the point of his sword "who are you and what do
   you want" mira says nervously
6   veiw on strangers face he is smiling "for all you vampire fucks to
   die"

page 7
1   agozyen walking out of the city arms and feet covered in blood
2   veiw from side single knight running after agozyen he is missing his
   left arm and still has his sword in his right "die monster"
3   veiw from in front of agozyen who still has his back to the knight
   "what a fool"
4   the knight swinging his sword which apears to be cutting into agozyen
5   veiw on the knights face his sword in the ground and agozyen is gone
   the knight is weaping "ill let you live this time sir knight only because
   you have what your brothers lacked and that is the will to live and
   fight for your home"

page 8
1   veiw from side of mira and the stranger several more strangers have
   apearred all wearing sparce armor and all have weapons drawn on
   both mira and rome who has a hand on his glasses
2   "about damn time mira what the fuck you know how bad that hurts
   and why are you so silent you usualy enjoy the kill" rome says
   putting on his glasses still on hands and knees
3   rome raises his head up to see mira at sword point and everyone
   standing around him "oh well shit"
4   veiw from behind rome and mira with a small figure with green hair
   on the harrizon "you see it mira" rome says softly "ya i do" she
   replies "what are you two saying" the stranger with the sword says
   "CRY HAVOK" rome yells at the top of his voice
5   veiw from the shoulder of the stranger with the sword "and let slip the
   dogs of war" a voice from behind him says
6   veiw from side the stranger turns around to see agozyen standing
   there the mutilated bodies of his comrades lay on the ground at his
   feet

« Last Edit: October 07, 2009, 04:45:29 pm by shadowfire »

shadowfire

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Re: shadowfire's wanabe comic
« Reply #1 on: October 07, 2009, 04:45:44 pm »
page 9
1   veiw from behind mira rome and agozyen who have the stranger tied to
   a tree off the road rome has a dismembered arm in his hands drinking
   its blood
2   veiw from behind mira and agozyen rome is not seen "who sent you
   worm" mira says "go fuck yourself vamp bitch" the stranger says
3   "i was hopeing you would say something like that" mira says
4   veiw on mira and agozyens faces mira looks surprized the is a loud
   crunch from off panel
5   veiw backed up from agozyen and mira so rome is now in frame
   holding the arm which has a bite taken out of it rome is looking up at
   mira and agozyen
6   rome has the arm behind him now "did you just" mira says pointing at
   rome  "no i just broke the bone on accident" rome defends "alright
   because if you had" mira responds

page 10
1   veiw from behind agozyen and mira who have turned back to the
   stranger "who sent you" mira said as she breaks the strangers left arm
2   the stranger just smiles and points behind mira and agozyen "he did"
3   "what a welcome surprize to see you again my old friends" someone
   behind them says
4   same veiw mira and agozyen whirl to face the new arrival who is still
   off panel
5   veiw on rome who is backing up in fear on the ground
« Last Edit: October 07, 2009, 05:00:09 pm by shadowfire »

shadowfire

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Re: shadowfire's wanabe comic
« Reply #2 on: October 07, 2009, 08:35:36 pm »
page 11
1   veiw of dominus standing in front of agozyen and mira with his hands
   outspread "how have you been since last we met my old friend"
2   "rome take mira and get out of here now" agozyen comands rome
   standing with fists clenched
3   "who is that agozyen" rome asks now next to mira with his hands on
   her shoulders to escort her away "a demon from the pits of hell"
   agozyen responds
4   "agozyen you flatter me" dominus says still just standing there with
   his hands out
5   "i wont leave you alone with him agozyen" mira says moving one of
   romes hands off her shoulder "mira i might not come back from this
   one" agozyen said reaching to take off his mask
6   "come on we have to get out of here now" rome says dragging mira off
   panel while she has a hand outstreached toward agozyen pleading to
   stay

page 12
1   view on dominus "so your going strait to full strength this time
   agozyen" he says with a smirk "last time it took you almost a full five
   minutes to realize you couldnt beat me with that power restricing mask
   on"
2   veiw on agozyen starting to pull the mask away from his face "because
   this time i wont let you harm anyone i care about last time was a
   mistake that cost the lives of a squad of my finiest hunters"
3   veiw of mira and rome running through the country side rome is leading
   and pulling mira by her hand "how could we do that to him we just left
   him there to die you felt how strong that guy was even agozyen might
   not be able to win" mira says with tears pouring down her face "he did
   it so we could live and find them" rome said still running
4   "find who" mira said still crying "find the brother hood of blood" rome
   said never looking back

page 13
1   several days later in a large town mira and rome are sitting in a bar in
   a secluded cornor everyone in the bar seems to be having a good time
   with a local celebration
2   veiw on rome and mira "how do we find them" mira asks leaning into
   rome "i dont know mira i just dont know they are only a rumor but then
   again so was agozyen before we finaly met him"
3   "can i get you two lovers anything" a waitress asks as she comes by the
   table carrying a tray of drinks and food "you can leave them alone we
   have business to conduct" a strange voice off panel says
4   veiw from further back to reveal a man in black with a mask covering
   just below his eyes down "oh im sorry sir i didnt mean to intrude" the
   waitress says as she shuffles away
5   veiw from over romes shoulderthe masked man stands at the edge of the
   table and sits down a letter "this is for you from mutual friends lets
   leave it at that"

page 14
1   rome picks up the letter and begins to read "whats it say and whos it
   from" mira asks leaning over to try to read
2   "its from the brotherhood they say they know what happened and want
   to help theres a time and place here for us to meet them" rome says
   lowering the letter
3   "where are we suposed to go" mira asks "nowhere they want to meet us
   here" rome replies "well when" mira asks eyes bright with hope
4   "right now" a new stranger wearing the same mask as the man who
    brought the letter "good afternoon i am peirce you must be rome and
   mira am i correct"
5   "how did you" rome begins but is cut off "how did you know about
   agozyen" mira pleeds leaning towards the stranger
6   "all in good time may i sit" the stranger asks putting a hand towards    the open seat

page 15
1   veiw from free edge of table showing all three members sitting "so tell
   me have either of you seen the world outside" peirce asks looking at
   mira "of course we have i mean how couldnt you when you chase
   agozyen all over the place" mira responds
2   "i mean the real world not this little island youve been running around
   on all willy nilly the place with citys where the vampires rule" peirce
   continues "what are you talking about we are in the minority the
   humans run this place and are close to exterminating our kind" mira
   says stuned "your kind im not a vampire in fact most of the
   brotherhood are unturned"
3   rome and mira have a surprized look on their faces "let me explain a
   bit mira your a type three correct" peirce asks "yes i am" she responds
   "good im going to need you to reach out to agozyen and ask him which
   base he was taken to it might be his only chance for survival"
4   the faces of mira and agozyen side by side in panel "agozyen can you
   hear me" "ah mira it looks like peirce found you" "yes he did he wants
   to know where you are" "tell him its a code black he knows what to do"
5   mira falls sideways out of chair and onto the floor "mira are you
   alright speak to me" rome says looking on helplessly

page 16
1   veiw of mira laying on the ground rome kneeling over her holding her
   hand her eyes are slightly opened "mira are you ok" rome asks "what
   did he say miss" peirce asks still seated
2   "he said code black and that you would know what it meant" mira said
   proping herself up on one arm
3   veiw of peirce what is showing of his face is pale "did you say a code
   black thats much worse than we expected but we are prepeared"
4   veiw from free seat all three have retaken their original seats "whats a
   code black" rome asked looking over at peirce "it means hes been taken
   prisoner and has been taken to one of the larger camps" peirce replied
   "what camps what are you talking about" mira pleaded
5   peirce pulls a map out from under his coat and lays it on the table
6   veiw of the map there is a landmass around the size of australia "this
   is the place you have come to know where humans live in relative control
   only because of the efforts of agozyen and the brotherhood"
7   veiw of another map of a much larger land mass the edge of the first
   landmass "this is the real world where the vampires run wild under the
   controll of dominus the rather nice fellow you met earlier this is most
   likely where agozyen was taken its a city called  addonexus where
   dominus keeps his greatest prison

page 17
1   veiw from above agozyen is straped to a table and wearing his mask
   again "well nice place you have hear dom"
2   veiw from side dominus is standing next to the table along with a
   unidetifed man in a white doctors outfit with red stains all over it "im
   glad you like my new decorator would you like the tour"
3   "would you like to fuck youself" agozyen replied looking over at
   dominus" dominus just smirks "you may begin doctor"
4   few on agozyen the doctors hand is in fram with a metal screw looking
   device
5   the device is being drilled into agozyens head as blood runs out and
   agozyen screams in pain